Introductions
October 8, 2007
I am trying to figure out what would be a good introduction paragraph for my somehting beautiful composition. I know that there are many types of introductions to choose from: scare the reader, use onomatopoeia, ask a question, looking back, use a quote, or make the reader wonder. I knew that scaring the reader would just be plain silly for this type of composition, so I tried a few other different introductions.
Onomatopoeia – Thwaaaack! I could could hear the baseballs craching off the bats during batting practice as I handed my ticket to the usher just inside the ballpark. I knew that I was in for an evening of excitement, but I did not know how that excitement would be so pleasing to my eyes.
Ask a question -If told you that I went to a place that was filled with dirt, grass, sweat, and about one million and one stinky smells, how could I possibly convince you that it is the most beautiful place int he world? Well if you’ve ever been to a baseball game, you just might understand. All you need is a ticket and an open mind.
Looking back – I was just seven years old when I found the greatest place on earth. My dad buckled me into the car, popped a cap on my noggin, and handed me a ticket. I clung to that ticket like my life depended on it. I handed my ticket to the gentleman on the inside of the ballpark and I stepped into the most beautiful place my eyes have ever seen.
Use a quote – “Programs, get your programs!” “Footlong, who needs a footlong?” “Cotton caaandyyyyyy.” Programs, hotdogs, cotton, I could only be at one place, the ballpark. My first baseball game was the most beautiful experience I have ever had.
Make the reader wonder – 40,000 people, 40,000 different voices, but all attention is on the nine guys with leather mits on their hands and the guy holding the piece of lumber. There are no knights, queens, or pawns involved, but this is the most beautiful real-life chess match on the planet. This is the splendid battle of wits, might, and luck known as the average baseball game.
Tell me which intro. I should use for my something beautiful composition.
You should use a question because it will make the reader want to read more.
I am going to be using a Look Back because for my opinion Look Back is interesting.
I really like the onomatopoeia one thats what i think you should do.
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Cami
I like, “use a quote”. It just, in my opinion puts however is reading it, in the story. That makes the reader want to read more. If you just put, Someone who worked there said get your hot dogs. that would be un-applealing.
I would put, “Do a quote.”
I think that they are all great but, for this staory I would use, your use a qoute because it says that you are in a stadium but it doesn’t say what kind of stadium untill the very end and that is a good introduction for this story, in my opinoin, but the main reason i like it is because it makes you feel like your in a baseball park and trust me i know what that’s like
Ithink you should use onomatepia because your story can use a litle sound in it.
I would probally use a look back because it will make the reader wounder about the book and then they will read the book.
I’d chose make the person wonder so they don’t know what they’re so they keep reading the story
Dear Mr. Mikelson
I think you should do the use a quote. Because it can start out with anyone talking and because I would do that one too
I’d chose make the person wonder so they don’t know what they’re so they keep reading the story
Mr.Mikkelson I would use an onomatopoiea because that seems the only thing that fits with my story and thats the only thing I want to do.
What I would use is make the “reader wonder”.
I think you should do looking back or the onomatopoeia because they both are intresting and so the reader can read it more often and also that they can get the story more.The onomatopoeia sounds great when you read it and the looking back one I also like because I liked the part when you said he popped a cap on my noggin that was funny and those are the ones you should pick!!!!
My honest opinnion is that you shuold use a question because it makes you want to read what’s next. Like when I read the back of a book I think to myself ”Oh well this suonds like a good book I’ll just read the first page to see what it’s about.” Then it’s not just the page that I intented to do, it’s the whole book!!!
In my opinion Ithink you should use a look back so when you tell your story the reader or listener will know whats going on. If you use the look back everyone will know what your meaning to say and they will have more thing to tell you about your story like suggestions, opinions,thoughts and complements!
*when I responded I accidently said ask a question. I meant make the reader wonder*
I like the….. Onomatopoeia, becuse when you use sound for me I can picture me wacthing the game. Like for yours I can picture the battre hiting the ball and makeing a home run. I don’t just like it for that reuson, I like it also because you put a lot of detal. Also good sentes like but I did not know how that excitement would be so pleasing to my eyes. I hope I was useful to you.
I think you should use a look back because that will make the story more interesting…In my opinion I think it will make the story more interesting.
I think that a Onomatopoeia should be a really cool intro because it sounds like it is more realistic.
I think you should look back because it’s more of a story line than making noises which is not very good story line.
Mr.M-or Mr.Mikkelson,
I would use, “make the reader wounder” because I pictured myself as the reader and in my opinion, the thing that gets reading,-OR watching TV. The things I watch/read, they have too make me wounder.
When the reader wounders they want to find out what is going to happen next. That will cause them too READ it. well..-this is what happens too me. Its like a cause and efect.
What I would use is make the reader wonder because they might how that happened so it’ll make them read more.
I like Onomatopoeias because I think that they sound realistitic.